英语期末考试优秀作文选 ( I )
下面是从各班中选出的英语期末考试优秀作文(22分以上),为了保持原汁原味,只附上老师点评,未作任何修改。大家可从中领略不同风格和表达方式,有利相互取长补短,提高英语书面表达能力。
题目:Is a Training Class or Family Tachr Ncssary?
舒瑶(12班)
Mor and mor middl school studnts ar going to all kinds of training classs or having family tachrs at th wknd . Thr ar two diffrnt viwpoints about it.
Som popl think that it is ncssary .First , thy can larn bttr with th hlp of th tachrs than by thmslvs. Scond , thy can strngthn what thy larn in class. Third , thy can gt mor usful things in thos classs.
Howvr , othr popl insist that it is not ncssary. For on thing, studnts will not listn carfully in thir normal classs if thy can gt th sam knowldg in training classs. For anothr thing, most snior studnts havn’t nough tim to rst . What’s wors, th purpos of most of th training classs and family tachrs is to arn mony.
In my opinion, a training class or family tachr is not ncssary. W can study wll at school if w work hard.
文章条理清晰,内容完整,语意连贯,语病少,且表达灵活(见划线部分)。(点评:王柏树老师)
陈颖 (7班)
Mor and mor middl school studnts ar going to all kinds of training classs or having family tachrs at th wknd. Thr ar two diffrnt viwpoints about it.
Som popl think that a training class or family tachr is quit ncssary. Following a tachr is always bttr than slf study. For on thing, it can strngthn th knowldg in class, for anothr, studnts can larn mor.
But som othr popl think it is unncssary to hav classs lik this. Firstly, studnts may asily gt into th habit of dpnding on othrs. Scondly, holiday is tim for rst, studnts can’t kp studying without any rst. And what’s mor, most training classs and family tachrs ar in th purpos of making mony. Studnts can’t gt good ducation in such classs.
In my opinion, diffrnt studnts hav diffrnt situation. If a studnt is not good at slf study, mayb a training class is fit for him. But if a studnt think that h could trust himslf, h will nvr nd it.
文章结构合理,层次清晰,简洁流畅,过度词使用得当;但少数句子和词不够得体或有误,如黑体部分。(点评:赵守斌老师)
雷洋 ( 21 班 )
Mor and mor middl school studnts ar going to all kinds of training classs or having family tachrs at th wknd. Thr ar two diffrnt viwpoints about it.
Som popl think that it’s ncssary to go to training classs or hav family tachrs. In thir opinions, following th tachrs’ instructions is mor hlpful than slf study. For on thing, studnts may strngthn what thy hav larnd in class; for anothr, thy can study much mor from th tachr.
Howvr, othr popl think that it’s not ncssary to do so, bcaus dpnding on tachrs is a bad habit. Bsids, studnts should hav tim to tak a rst and quit a lot of tachrs in training classs ar not strict with th studnts. Thy just car about th mony that will go to thir pockt.本作文共6页,当前在第1页123456
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